The 'Final' Script

After taking into consideration the feedback we got from the first reading of our script to our peers and the feedback Dom gave us in our group tutorial, we have devised the 'final' script we will use in our film. Although it is up for improvisation by the actors and the director on set if the group believes it will improve the quality of the film overall.

The main feedback we got was linked towards the strength of the narrative/script itself and how to not make it cliché or cheesy as our idea has been touched on in a lot of dramas prior to ours. We thought the best way of getting around this problem was to make the actors very aware of the script and the message we are trying to portray before they actually act it out, this is to get a genuine performance from them both and allow them to really get into character before we point the cameras at them. We didn't take this criticism to heart as we already know script writing is not our strong point and we want to maximise the strength of our piece by any means possible. We were also advised to really try and get a good performance out of our actors by being friendly and understanding towards them as our project relies heavily on the body language and realism the actors can portray.